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Little girl with broken wings

Little girl that wants to die
Who has broken your wings to fly?

Who has wounded your spirit so
that only one wish remains: to go?

Who has torn your soul apart
Broke in pieces your little heart?

Who left you there all alone
never finding your way home?

Who has stolen your last dreams?
There aren't anymore; so it seems

Who put out the hope's small flame
making you believe we're all the same?

Who raped your sweet innocence
And left you now - with no defense?
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My wings were broken long ago
who has done so, I don't know

My spirit is wounded but so deep
I can't tell you what made me bleed

The wounds in my heart can never heal
is pain everything that's left to feel?

I know that here I cannot stay
but home is still too far away

My dreams, they faded with daylight
and this world's cold n'cruel sight

Hopes cannot survive dark despair
and I'm caught in its enclosing lair

Innocent I could never be
because the one to blame is ME.
My best poem so far.
I really should start writing again.
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Inufan911 Featured By Owner Apr 27, 2010
I really liked this. The deep meaning was very evident at the end, but also throughout the whole thing. It really made you think and reconsider the implications of it. The flow was excellent, and the way you presented it was very appealing and drew you in. All in all, it was an excellent piece of work, and you should be very proud!
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Nirelleth Featured By Owner Apr 27, 2010
Thank you so much. Sadly I don't do poetry anymore, I don't know why …†
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Inufan911 Featured By Owner Apr 28, 2010
You should continue, and maybe consider publishing your work on a poetry site or something along that line. More people need to see your work!
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Nirelleth Featured By Owner Apr 29, 2010
:aww: that is sweet.
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Inufan911 Featured By Owner Apr 29, 2010
It's nuthin' but the truth hon!
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Lunacy-Enfolds Featured By Owner Dec 24, 2009   Writer
The flow was straightforward and kept the rhythm going throughout which made it easy to read and understand.

Like others have said above, the separation of the stanzas splitting up the questions and the answers was a sweet idea =)

Your word choice is to the point and I really could feel this sense of hopelessness and self torment. You captured the emotion very well IMO

Good job =D should definitely get more of your work up
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Nirelleth Featured By Owner Dec 30, 2009
Thank you :heart:
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Lunacy-Enfolds Featured By Owner Dec 30, 2009   Writer
your welcome =D
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Captain-Boe Featured By Owner Aug 24, 2009  Student General Artist
I LIKE IT
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Arcalian Featured By Owner Aug 19, 2009
:cuddle:

Take....these broken wings....and learn to fly again...
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Nirelleth Featured By Owner Aug 20, 2009
:aww:
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idreaminglasscolor Featured By Owner Jul 8, 2009  Hobbyist Writer
Wow, for someone who had been in this position this is very relatable. It's strange reading something and it seeming like the author knows you. But, i really liked this poem. Good job.
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Nirelleth Featured By Owner Jul 13, 2009
i know, I have had this feeling too.
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idreaminglasscolor Featured By Owner Jul 13, 2009  Hobbyist Writer
Mhm.
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ShinHezekiah Featured By Owner May 26, 2009
Absolutely brilliant.

The link to the picture you mentioned is broken so I feel as if I'm somehow missing out on something. It's still an excellent poem though. :)
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Nirelleth Featured By Owner May 27, 2009
you don't miss much, i removed the image, because it was a very old work, and totally not up to my skills now.
But i am glad you like it! :hug:
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JWiesner Featured By Owner Apr 2, 2009
Absolutely. Touching. Bitter and yet sorta melancholic too.
It's definitely written pain, but amazing because of the talent of how it's written down.

Wow.

Have to feature this in my shoutboard for a while...
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Nirelleth Featured By Owner Apr 3, 2009
:aww: Danke für das Featuren :hug: Freut mich, dass es dir gefällt.
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sorentense Featured By Owner Feb 28, 2009  Hobbyist Writer
This was gorgeous. Your meter and rhyme are refreshingly constant. I loved the separation between the two ideas, and how the little girl reflects the speaker. The psychology of the main speaker was interesting as well - a very good portrayal of how many people react to abuse/mistreatment.

Sounds a lot like some things a friend has said to me before, so maybe my interpretation is skewed by the memories popping up. Still, a wonderful poem, and I loved it. :+fav:
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Nirelleth Featured By Owner Mar 1, 2009
Glad you enjoyed it, I am very keen on meters and rhymes, I had quite a good education on those, so I dislike it if they are not good in a poem. Well more for the meter then for the rhyme, actually I don't rhyme all that often, but I use other stylistic means like repetition, rythme etc.

:hug:
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sorentense Featured By Owner Mar 1, 2009  Hobbyist Writer
Yeah... Meter is what usually makes a poem flow in my head as poetry rather than prose. (Breaking a paragraph up into lines DOES NOT make it poetry!) The meter is special to me because, well... it's like attaching the words to the beat of the narrator's heart. It brings it to life.

:hug:
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Nirelleth Featured By Owner Mar 4, 2009
:nod: yes, it can really make so much with a poem, but some people don't seem to pay any attention to it.

SOmetimes it is also good if a poem doesn't flow, but then that must be used intentionally.
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sorentense Featured By Owner Mar 5, 2009  Hobbyist Writer
Yeah, I know that with certain themes, writers will purposely make a poem jerky and flow-resistant. (But it drives me crazy!!!!)
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Nirelleth Featured By Owner Mar 14, 2009
mhm, me not, I understand some poems, where it is good if there are not flowing, because for example if you are picturing some kind of nervously feeling, then it won't flow but rather be short and sometimes a little "stuck".
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sorentense Featured By Owner Mar 14, 2009  Hobbyist Writer
That does make sense. I guess...
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keeper-of-innocence Featured By Owner Aug 7, 2007
very good poem. Quite sad though:-(
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Nirelleth Featured By Owner Aug 7, 2007
Thanks so much :hug:
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cryingpain Featured By Owner Jun 9, 2007
Truly a sad poem I like how its written in two perspectives :)
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Nirelleth Featured By Owner Jun 9, 2007
Thanks so much! :bow:
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VincentsSpellbook Featured By Owner Jun 8, 2007   Writer
I can't really think of anything to say that the other comments haven't already thoroughly covered so I'm just gonna fave it then go get some chips.
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kittykittyhunter Featured By Owner Jun 7, 2007   Writer
I like the way that this poem contains two voices, it gave it a unique touch which I really enjoyed. Keep yourself strong.
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Nirelleth Featured By Owner Jun 8, 2007
Thanks so much, I will try to :hug:
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Mysty-Spirit Featured By Owner Jun 6, 2007
beautiful poem.. I understand that feeling so well..
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Nirelleth Featured By Owner Jun 6, 2007
Thanks so much :hug:
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Mysty-Spirit Featured By Owner Jun 6, 2007
:) :hug:
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Pussy-Asbest Featured By Owner Jun 5, 2007
I like this. It has a nice rhyming pattern with just a few small bumps in it
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Viscious-Speed Featured By Owner Jun 5, 2007   General Artist
The poem itself is beautiful & most importantly, real. Many people will be able to relate to this & that for me is a good thing because sometimes it's just comforting to know that someone is in the same boat & u sort of have an ally, if u know what I mean.

Now, blame urself all u want but I hope when u get to the point where u feel tired of it, u will take that step to forgive urself & move on & into better days.
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Nirelleth Featured By Owner Jun 5, 2007
Mhm I think I am at the moment making this step of forgive myself though it needs time cause it's a huge step, but I have alot of help from my fiance so it should be managable.
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pool-of-blood Featured By Owner Jun 4, 2007
Wow thats so beautiful!! I love it!

So touching, and whether taken litteraly or metaphorically it is so easy to relate to and understand! :clap: me aplaudes your skill!
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Nirelleth Featured By Owner Jun 8, 2007
Thanks so much, I am glad you like it so much :bow: :hug:
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emwyalyce Featured By Owner Jun 3, 2007  Hobbyist Photographer
i love it so. :fav+:

xx
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Nirelleth Featured By Owner Jun 4, 2007
Thanks so much :hug:
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clow-reed16 Featured By Owner Jun 3, 2007
0_o wow. this si really well written. is there a story behind this?
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Nirelleth Featured By Owner Jun 4, 2007
Mhm its somehow abit biographic. I dunno, it came to my mind just after waking up ;) ^_^
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clow-reed16 Featured By Owner Jun 4, 2007
wow its really well written :)
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Ikuko195 Featured By Owner Feb 23, 2007
Very intense and emotional poetry! I like your style!
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Nirelleth Featured By Owner Feb 23, 2007
thanks alot
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PearlHeart Featured By Owner Jan 14, 2007   Writer
you remind me a lot of christina rosste (bad spelling) theres a dominating feel of sadness, yet its reflecting you a fan BTW?
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Nirelleth Featured By Owner Jan 14, 2007
i don't even know her o.o
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PearlHeart Featured By Owner Jan 14, 2007   Writer
ummm shes an italin poet from the 1800's this poem reminded me of one of a her poems..
she had a sombre, reflective approch in her poetry.. [link]
i had to study one of her poems once... Amen. just seemed a little like her style.. ;)
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