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Little girl with broken wings

Little girl that wants to die
Who has broken your wings to fly?

Who has wounded your spirit so
that only one wish remains: to go?

Who has torn your soul apart
Broke in pieces your little heart?

Who left you there all alone
never finding your way home?

Who has stolen your last dreams?
There aren't anymore; so it seems

Who put out the hope's small flame
making you believe we're all the same?

Who raped your sweet innocence
And left you now - with no defense?
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My wings were broken long ago
who has done so, I don't know

My spirit is wounded but so deep
I can't tell you what made me bleed

The wounds in my heart can never heal
is pain everything that's left to feel?

I know that here I cannot stay
but home is still too far away

My dreams, they faded with daylight
and this world's cold n'cruel sight

Hopes cannot survive dark despair
and I'm caught in its enclosing lair

Innocent I could never be
because the one to blame is ME.
My best poem so far.
I really should start writing again.
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Inufan911 Featured By Owner Apr 27, 2010
I really liked this. The deep meaning was very evident at the end, but also throughout the whole thing. It really made you think and reconsider the implications of it. The flow was excellent, and the way you presented it was very appealing and drew you in. All in all, it was an excellent piece of work, and you should be very proud!
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Nirelleth Featured By Owner Apr 27, 2010
Thank you so much. Sadly I don't do poetry anymore, I don't know why …†
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Inufan911 Featured By Owner Apr 28, 2010
You should continue, and maybe consider publishing your work on a poetry site or something along that line. More people need to see your work!
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Nirelleth Featured By Owner Apr 29, 2010
:aww: that is sweet.
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Inufan911 Featured By Owner Apr 29, 2010
It's nuthin' but the truth hon!
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Lunacy-Enfolds Featured By Owner Dec 24, 2009   Writer
The flow was straightforward and kept the rhythm going throughout which made it easy to read and understand.

Like others have said above, the separation of the stanzas splitting up the questions and the answers was a sweet idea =)

Your word choice is to the point and I really could feel this sense of hopelessness and self torment. You captured the emotion very well IMO

Good job =D should definitely get more of your work up
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Nirelleth Featured By Owner Dec 30, 2009
Thank you :heart:
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Lunacy-Enfolds Featured By Owner Dec 30, 2009   Writer
your welcome =D
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Captain-Boe Featured By Owner Aug 24, 2009  Student General Artist
I LIKE IT
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Arcalian Featured By Owner Aug 19, 2009
:cuddle:

Take....these broken wings....and learn to fly again...
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